Thursday, November 16, 2017

Follow Thy Elsewhere



Somewhere out there
Lies thy elsewhere
For thy beauty to pair
Thy miracles to share

Nowhere else but there
A universe lays bare
For you to ensnare
Seek, for thy gem to flare

Somewhere in between
A love for you to preen
Splendor for a life unseen
Save for eyes ever green

Hearts from hate to wean
Majesties for you to glean
Bloating thy soul’s cuisine
Crave no more, precious queen

©Alwi Shatry, All Rights Reserved


For dVerse Open Night



20 comments:

  1. Beautiful!💕 Especially like; "Somewhere in between a love for you to preen splendor for a life unseen save for eyes ever green."💕

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    1. Thank you Sanaa. Happy to have you here and that you enjoyed this.

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  2. You did well with the rhyming! 4 rhymes in a row x 4 verses is challenging, and it still reads well.

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  3. This has such a Persian feel to it. Liked it very much.

    Lady Nyo

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    1. Would never have guessed to be honest. Thank you for reviewing.

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  4. I love the idea of "thy elsewhere". A beautiful poem!

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  5. I think it's the search that matters more than the finding.

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  6. The idea of "the elsewhere" is intriguing, and you wrote this beautifully!

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    1. Very kind of you. Happy that you liked it. If you can't find it here, there's always an elsewhere in waiting!

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  7. I love the rhyming verses and this part is my favorite:

    For you to ensnare
    Seek, for thy gem to flare

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    1. Many thanks Grace. A pleasure to have you here.

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  8. Eight monorhymes in a chain, yet the outcome is unforced and the message wonderful. You rocked it, my friend.

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    1. Thank you for your generous remarks Collin. Really glad you think I rocked. I'm humbled.

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