Thursday, September 7, 2017

Stalk Talk




Pleasure in stalking
Man, for killing character
Beast, killing merrily for fun

Stalkers patiently
Wait for unsuspecting prey
To pounce, trash, kill then snigger


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©Alwi Shatry September 7, 2017
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13 comments:

  1. KweliSeptember 7, 2017 at 9:06 PM

    My very first attempt at Sedoka.

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  2. Sanaa RizviSeptember 8, 2017 at 1:59 AM

    Brilliant execution of form here.. and yes those stalkers are something to be aware of!

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    1. KweliSeptember 8, 2017 at 3:23 AM

      Sigh, what a relief and thank you for the encouraging comment, Sanaa. Had my first attempt fallen flat on its face, I was ready to invent a new form: Faceless Sedoka, lol.

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  3. AsobimeSeptember 8, 2017 at 4:28 AM

    Oh! I've never tried this form. Scared to death of it! But you did, and it's an interesting form.

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  4. AsobimeSeptember 8, 2017 at 4:28 AM

    Asobime is Lady Nyo...an earlier version. LOL!

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  5. Petru J ViljoenSeptember 8, 2017 at 5:37 AM

    I'm going to have to try my hand at this form after your poem. Well done. I love the title of your blog!

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  6. annell4September 8, 2017 at 7:46 AM

    I think may have it reversed, perhaps it should be, "beast killing character/man killing just for fun."

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  7. tonispencerSeptember 8, 2017 at 8:58 AM

    I agree with Annell. Man the most dangerous creature on the planet.

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  8. The BizzaSeptember 8, 2017 at 12:52 PM

    I'm unfamiliar with Sedoka. I'll have to research and give it a go myself.

    The form is intriguing and the topic is fascinating as well. I like the idea of conflating man with beast as we can be the cruelest member of the animal species.

    I like it as written. :)

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  9. brudbergSeptember 8, 2017 at 1:50 PM

    I remember doing sedoka... like your effort, though I try to agree with Annell ... no big confidence in men.

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  10. GraceSeptember 8, 2017 at 6:21 PM

    Annell's twist is a chilling one ~ Good job with the form.

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  11. Frank HubenySeptember 9, 2017 at 5:37 AM

    Nice description of those who lack empathy enough to kill and snigger.

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  12. UnknownSeptember 9, 2017 at 7:48 AM

    It's frightening to know that there are people like this.

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